On May 20, 2009, at 1:09 PM, Craig Hancock wrote: > You can certainly make the judgment that Ed's version shows more > flexibility on the part of the writer, but it doesn't make it a > better essay, Craig, it's clearly better. You offer no evidence for why it is worse or even equal. Own up, dude: It is clearly better, but, yes, it still sucks. Your tower is showing. The rest of your argument is irrelevant. You are preaching to the choir. We do know what makes a good essay. We know that varying sentence starts is not a panacea. To join or leave this LISTSERV list, please visit the list's web interface at: http://listserv.muohio.edu/archives/ateg.html and select "Join or leave the list" Visit ATEG's web site at http://ateg.org/