I sounded snarky in my last email. I'm sorry for that. But you really are arrogantly dismissive of something I teach my students as a mini-lesson but do not require them to do in their essays. I have seen better writing from them, and it is annoying to have such strong evidence be dismissed without much thought. I do think you have not thought this through. Susan On May 20, 2009, at 7:57 PM, Susan van Druten wrote: > On May 20, 2009, at 1:09 PM, Craig Hancock wrote: >> You can certainly make the judgment that Ed's version shows more >> flexibility on the part of the writer, but it doesn't make it a >> better essay, > > Craig, it's clearly better. You offer no evidence for why it is > worse or even equal. Own up, dude: It is clearly better, but, > yes, it still sucks. Your tower is showing. > > The rest of your argument is irrelevant. You are preaching to the > choir. We do know what makes a good essay. We know that varying > sentence starts is not a panacea. > > To join or leave this LISTSERV list, please visit the list's web > interface at: http://listserv.muohio.edu/archives/ateg.html and > select "Join or leave the list" > Visit ATEG's web site at http://ateg.org/ > To join or leave this LISTSERV list, please visit the list's web interface at: http://listserv.muohio.edu/archives/ateg.html and select "Join or leave the list" Visit ATEG's web site at http://ateg.org/