Hey Jordan, what do you think?  Are you unclear what this writer meant?  Is the known/new contract broken for you?  Be honest.  Are you really going to say that a writer who uses a possessive adjective in the previous sentence as the "new" creates coherence problems when it is presented as a subject as the "known" in a consecutive sentence?  Remember this is a high school writer who will not know the difference between a noun and an adjective.

Be vewy, vewy caweful how you answer.  I am prepared to release Brad on you.  He will find examples in professional writing.  And once I release him, he will not stop.  He will hunt down examples, and he will email them to you, and they will be bolded and underlined in full html.  You may run, but you cannot hide!



On May 27, 2009, at 7:02 PM, Jordan Earl wrote:

Can I throw in a question here?  The revised version seems to me to create a new problem... we have only one sentence with a varying start now, and in it, the subject is a pronoun referring back to an adjective in the previous sentence.  I realize that this phenomenon is acceptable in spoken speech and probably happens a lot in writing, but I'm wondering if others out there teaching would point this out to students or let it go...

<Landon is comparing Jamie’s weight to leaves falling.  She has become so sick that she has lost a lot of weight, and he has really started to notice it.>
 
It seems to me that *she* would work well if Landon were female; alternately, one might begin the second sentence with *Jamie* and solve the problem, as the 2nd *she* would then be clear.
 
Curious what others think --
--Jordan 

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