Well-stated, Craig!  I totally agree.  Unfortunately, getting people in the
business world to commit to even one day of training is a challenge.  My
goals are to help them have a more effective writing style with their
paragraphs, sentences, words, and formats plus a more efficient writing
process.  Going beyond some of the basics would be so wonderful, but the
tick-tocking clock simply doesn't permit it.  
 
Overall during all of my modules, I emphasize clarity for the participants'
various audiences and purposes as the most important goal.  First and
foremost, if they can remember they're writing for someone other than
themselves, that gives them a launching pad for the other skills we've been
discussing.
 
Linda
 
 
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From: Assembly for the Teaching of English Grammar
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Sent: Monday, March 10, 2008 9:08 AM
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Subject: Re: Expletives


Linda,
   My cat-skinning sentence is better understood as "existential"--my
error--similar to "It is raining" or "There is plenty of food." We seem to
have a resistance to "be" as intransitive. "More than one good way to skin a
cat exists" would be an alternative. 
   I think if I were trying to improve writing in a one-day workshop,
wordiness is something I would target. But we do have to be careful about
it. There are very good functional reasons for extraposition. And I would
caution against revising sentences outside the context of their place in a
text and outside the discourse context. Robert's points seem largely on
target.
   The larger point I was hoping to make is that we we need a functional
understanding of language, not just a formal one. We also need goals that
are larger than reducing wordiness. Less wordy texts are often clearer
because we have (to quote the late great Don Murray) "gotten the static
out". But that raises clarity to a goal and makes cutting words a means and
not an end. 
   The operative question might be "What knowledge about language helps a
writer accomplish his or her own goals." We have to yank the attention away
from "what forms are correct." 
   
Craig

Linda Comerford wrote: 

Craig,



Regarding one of my pet peeves, "it" and "there" expletives, I'm wondering

if you would accept "Loving you is easy" as a more streamlined way of

saying, "It is easy to love you"?  I'm fine with your cat-skinning "there"

expletive.



As I believe you can see from my posts, I try to give those in my one-day

classes information to help them make informed decisions about their writing

afterwards.  If I received 50 cents every time I see folks write sentences

like, "There are many reasons why the cafeteria should remain open beyond

2:00," in my 20+ year career, I'd be rich!  To me, such sentences are the

equivalent of starting a sentence in a presentation with "uh" or "um."  My

theory about expletives is that they start so many sentences because their

writers often don't know where they want their sentences to go.  Writing is

discovery, so those lead-in words give them time to get to their point.  But

if they keep the expletive, they often delay the subject until the middle of

the sentence where their readers are more likely to miss it.  Instead, I

offer them the option to start with the subject as in this re-write:  "The

cafeteria should remain open beyond 2:00 for many reasons."  Writers and

readers alike appreciate such streamlined clarity.



That's when my "save 50 cents a word" editorial tip comes into play.  My

participants not only resonate to it but remember it.  I've encountered

folks from one of my classes over 10 years ago tell me they draft without

regard to wordiness but then revise with that 50-cent idea in mind.  Maybe

with inflation I should up it to $1.00....



Linda





 

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