In my business writing and grammar workshops, I strongly suggest avoiding
passive voice when a sentence contains all the components of an active
sentence.  Those are normally the ones ending in a "by" prepositional
phrase.  Since people in the business world are so darn wordy (they tell me
it's a habit from trying to fill those 500-word theme requirements), I offer
them the challenge of looking to save 50 cents a word for every unnecessary
one they use.  
 
So they'd save a dollar by changing the following passive sentence to an
active one:

Passive:  The proposal was proofread by the partner.
Active;  The partner proofread the proposal.

To find such passives, I have them use the Control F ("F" stands for "Find")
feature in Microsoft Word to find the word "by."  They prefer that to having
their grammar checkers simply indicating "Passive" without always offering
the active version. 
 
By the way, the Control F technique works for finding any words students use
too repetitiously.  Many struggle with using "that" unnecessarily.  Also,
one of my pet peeves is expletives, so I have my participants search for
"It" and "There" to identify and then eliminate them.
 
I hope these tips help all of you too.
 
Linda
 
Linda Comerford
Comerford Consulting
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From: Assembly for the Teaching of English Grammar
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Sent: Friday, March 07, 2008 2:05 PM
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Subject: Re: past perfect--a final note


Craig may well be right about Orwell's sentiments; however, Orwell himself
near the end of his essay offers a set of six "rules" (the word is his).
His fourth rule is "Never use the passive where you can use the active."  He
doesn't say "where you can use the active" but not the passive.  But he uses
passives in four of the first 15 sentences of "Politics," and it's not at
all difficult to substitute actives for each them.
Hurrah for Craig's "we need a more functional orientation to language so
that choice can be built on something more than personal or group
prejudice."

Ed Schuster


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