On May 20, 2009, at 1:09 PM, Craig Hancock wrote:
> You can certainly make the judgment that Ed's version shows more  
> flexibility on the part of the writer, but it doesn't make it a  
> better essay,

Craig, it's clearly better.  You offer no evidence for why it is  
worse or even equal.  Own up, dude:  It is clearly better, but, yes,  
it still sucks.  Your tower is showing.

The rest of your argument is irrelevant.  You are preaching to the  
choir.  We do know what makes a good essay.  We know that varying  
sentence starts is not a panacea.


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